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vanilla latte by ~SirMink:iconSirMink:

Categories Literature > Poetry > Human Nature > Open




woe is me
the blind man mumbles
as he cracks his cane
crisply on the concrete

crack crack

the cane won't protect him from
the busy mack truck (crack crack)
the fervent cyclist (crack crack)
or even the zealous witness (crack crack
oh hello have you found your lord today?)

it will protect him from

the businessman, walking, dressed and thin
the blind man cracks him on the shin

Oh, pardon me.
(Fuckin' blind bast...)         how u doin'
                                       sootman?
What did
you say?
                                       how u doin'
       sootman?
FFFine...
                                       i'd like sum ov
                                       that tasty vanilla latte

the blind man points in dim demand
to the latte in businessman's hand

What? Don't you have
somewhere to be?
                                       wat's rong, sootman?
                                       gotta git home
                                       to the wife & kidz?
(stare stare stare!
sip the latte!
sip the latte!)
                                       gotta git to ur horr
                                       on seventh avenue?
                                       gotta git to ur
                                       apointment?
(stare stare stare!)
                                       gotta git ur coke fix?
                                       gotta do sum bizniss?
(sip that latte!
sip it! sip it!)
                                       gotta pee, sootman?
                                       i'd like sum ov
                                       that tasty vanilla latte

and with a tear as its bonus flavor
the latte is left for the blind man to savor

crack crack sip
woe is me
crack crack sip
woe is me
©2005-2009 ~SirMink
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Author's Comments

wouldn't we all like some of
that tasty vanilla latte?

Daily Deviation

Given 2006-10-02

vanilla latte by ~SirMink slips sly humour around an uneasy topic to bring us well executed dialogue and a carefully controlled rhythm. (Suggested by `bananaprincess and Featured by `imperfect)

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`bananaprincess Oct 25, 2005, 9:44:06 PM
This is awesome! Your sense of voice and rhythm is great, and I love the sly humor.

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~SirMink Oct 25, 2005, 9:46:16 PM
Thank you. :) It was a lot of fun to write, and much lighter tone than a lot of my other pieces. :)

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~Rayli Oct 31, 2005, 12:17:38 PM
This is great :D *suddenly gets a craving for a vanilla latte*

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~EverAutumn Nov 1, 2005, 11:19:59 PM
Hee! That's so cool! :D

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~ashellessmind Nov 3, 2005, 7:45:23 PM
Wow.

Sootman.

This was great.
amazing.
really, it was.

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~pebble170 Nov 21, 2005, 5:52:39 AM
I'm not sure whether to laugh or cry... There are so many hidden messages/mroals in this, but told in a humourous way. Cleverly done!

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~AwesomeIsma Nov 21, 2005, 8:39:41 AM
last lines are truely essence of it all...v good work:thumbsup:

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And miles to go before I sleep,
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~UglyGargoyle379 Nov 21, 2005, 7:43:07 PM
I like it, it's different from what I usually see, and that's a plus..:)
Very well written, it flows nicely

:bye: Toodles :bye:

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~gutterbreed Nov 21, 2005, 8:59:17 PM
ooh, the subject feels so rarely breached - more like, spoken of quite often but from the other side.
the spelling sprinkled flavor
but now the coffee tastes bitter and
i have to say this is wonderful :)

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~Amon-Rukh Nov 22, 2005, 5:34:34 PM
Wow, that was bizzare. (In a good way.) I think "FFFine..." would have been my answer too. Some other great lines in there, especially
"the blind man points in dim demand
to the latte in businessman's hand"

One thing though. (And it totally ruins the enitre poem for me. Just kidding. =P )
"(sip that latte!
sip it! sip it!)"

I think this would be better as "the latte" instead of "that latte" so it reflects "sip the latte!" from the previous stanza.

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